Sample Essay 2

How interesting the paper is
How understandable the paper is
How convincing the paper is
How well-developed and supported the various topic sentences are
           
              In my opinion the paper that works best is the sample paper 2, “Stories of Survival” it begins by Introducing the author and title of the book that he will be talking about, the writer begins his introduction paragraph by giving a background on some of the main points that the author of the book Sherman Alexie addresses in his Book The Absolutely True Diary of A Part-time Indian. One thing that really caught my eye is that the writer of the essay brought in another book by Sherman Alexie Smoke Signal.
         
              Im not sure if I would call this an interesting paper it does explain what alexie went through in his life all the struggles, humiliation from other race as well as his own. I feel like the writer just took a bunch of sentence from the whole book and tried to connect them just as is not breaking them down and making a clear point. It got boring after the first paragraph with the writer writing short sentences that werent making any sense at all

              The paper is a little hard to understand it jumps from topic to topic too many short sentences that do not connect with each other. I did not see a clear point that the writer was trying to portray throughout the story.
           
              The whole essay has to many points that writer needs to address and break down he/she needs to breakdown the points that he is making and develop them a little more. I feel that the way the the writer began the essay explaining Alexie's life was good but he should of just focused on one part that he was trying to make a point of and developed. He does not have topic sentences that do not connect with what he is saying in the paragraph. Every single paragraph has a different senario that has not been fully examined therefore its not making a clear point or connecting back to the main topic sentence.
           
               The essay as a whole was ok, with the introduction being the best part of the whole essay. The writer has to note down a few main points that he wants to base the essay on and go from there making it a little more clear for a person who has never read the book and giving a clear summary of the book to that person.